I really enjoyed the narrative between Devon and Runes relationship and how they explored their feelings towards one another, and freely exploring each other without commitment.
I would really love to have a copy of the illustrations from the game which is usually present on the game files but they are somehow unavailable. I hope we could have a bit of an access to them, but please keep up the good work!!! I love everything about this game
I unfortunately was kind of disappointed by this. Which is not to say that I think it is bad, but it just felt like something was missing compared to the main VN and after mulling over it a bit for me it comes down to what feels like the ultimate goal or purpose of the work. A lot of what I really like about the sex in Dawn Chorus is that it is full of tension, unease, a kind of excitement and perhaps most crucially the sex is never the most interesting thing going on.
Which I guess I just didn't really feel that in BH, the sex was kind of the most interesting thing and it was fine but also kind of whatever. and maybe that's all it was meant to be, a kind of nice pleasant short but there is a clear gesture towards a sort of melancholy and sadness and greater meaning which keeps it from being pleasant but also it does not really go far enough to have a real thrust or impact. It almost feels stuck in between the two ends.
Despite my criticisms I would still urge people to buy it though, because any money given to the development team is money well spent and they're doing really great stuff this one just sadly didn't really feel as good to me :(
This. I agree with everything(thought I do wish you did some formatting on your comment).
This VN doesn't understand what it's trying to be and ends up falling short in everything it does. Not a good porn VN, not a good short story, doesn't explore anything it starts exploring beyond the ankle depth...
And why is it told from no one's perspective? That's the one thing everyone expects from a VN, doubly so from the creator of Dawn Chorus, where perspective is so important and used to such great effect?
Contrary to you, however, I'd like to warn people against buying this and instead consider supporting the Dawn Chorus patreon. This is not a good VN and the more obvious it becomes to the creator - the lower is the chance they will do something similarly undercooked in near future.
Broken Harbours was in huge part an experiment in writing in third perspective in a VN and in that regards I'm happy with the result. From the literary style to more adult themes, it was meant to be very unlike Dawn Chorus. I don't agree with it not sticking to a perspective.
I agree that the smuttier side and more serious one pull the story in two directions at once and now I wish I stuck only one of these. My interests shifted between the time I wrote down the rough idea and the time I sat down to write the text, the initial plan was for a much more lighthearted story. Still, in the end I'm happy with the result, and though I wish either I toned down the smutty side or leaned only into the horniness, I think it uses the word count well and is still worth a read. It is possible but unlikely that I'll revisit it in a future to tidy it up and expand on it, once the time allows and I need a breather from working on Dawn Chorus again.
First of all, thank you for replying. You owe me nothing, so it's nice to see you take time for this.
I understand this was never meant to be like Dawn Chorus, but it wasn't obvious until after I already finished the story. It's advertised as a side story to Dawn Chorus with the same characters and that's it - you can surely see where the confusion is coming from.
And even if I went into this with full understanding of what it is - I don't think I would enjoy it. This is a very personal, intimate story of a friendship blooming and being tested by a transformation into something different, and this heart of the story is great!
BUT!
The impersonal perspective is taking away from the experience. The abundance of narrator bits is taking away from the experience. And most of all, the smut part is taking away from the experience - not because it's smut, but because it is not an organic part of the plot. It's not really pulling the story in a different direction, it's not pulling it anywhere at all, it's a plot point that's just sitting there. It's important for the story, but it's not a part of the story - it is not exploring the characters. Everything leading up to it explores the characters, the scenes after it explore the characters, but the sex scene is just there.
IATERRY said it best - sex in Dawn Chorus was done better, because it always came in a form of an emotionally charged scene, characters bloomed in them. And in BH - it has no emotional weight, just some after-thoughts attached.
I want to see Rune nervously pacing Devon's apartment, biting his lips and mindlessly eating those frozen berries, worrying if he's using his friend. I want to see Devon worry and pull away mid-sex because he's worried what he's doing is going to make him lose a friend. I want Rune and Devon to stay real people in the most important part of the story!
What I'm trying to say is... There's a good VN here, but no offense, it's under the rubble of your experimentation. With all due respect, and I do respect you a great deal as a writer, I don't think it's a success.
What is the password? I was going through the preferences and i saw kinks so initially, i tried to enable it but it asks for a password, let me just simp for my deer boy okay??
From the title "Broken Harbours", and after playing the game, I think Devon and Rune are like the right person wrong time kind of situation, which leads to "more than friends, but not lover". Even though they spend time with each other and even do "the thing", their loneliness is still there, or I think at least it is for Rune.
After the shower, Rune decides to go home, even though Devon suggests staying with him for the night. The story does not explain about Rune much in the end so idk.
For Devon, looks like he is finding some peace with his past, and he gonna accept of what will happen between him and Rune, good or bad because it's just another page of his life.
"No ship can moor at broken harbours", this describes what happens to the both of them rn, they are not ready for a LTR yet.
Also, a daffodil means hope, but giving someone a single daffodil also means misfortune. (idk if it means anything but I'm just putting it out there)
One question is, after this story, do they actually do "the thing" more than once or is it just a one time? 🤔 (before the DC ofc)
Okay so. It's probably VERY unlikely, BUUTTTTTT Is there any chance that this'll possibly become temporarily free again? like every few months theres another free weekend thing, or is that not gonna happen? If it does, see image below. If it doesn't, see image below.
This was very very good. I lvoe the depth it added to Devon's story. I was a bit surprised at how bold and straightforward Rune was though, it didn't feel like him. But either way it was great. Still can't figure out the password though...
I loved this, especially since Rune and Devon are my two favorites from DC. I wonder how the events from this will color Rune and Devon's routes moving forward. I'm always rooting for our boy Arvo, but I'm curious to see how the previous feelings these two share will affect their opinion of Arvo. We already have seen Rune get a tad jealous during Devon's route.
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I really enjoyed the narrative between Devon and Runes relationship and how they explored their feelings towards one another, and freely exploring each other without commitment.
I would really love to have a copy of the illustrations from the game which is usually present on the game files but they are somehow unavailable. I hope we could have a bit of an access to them, but please keep up the good work!!! I love everything about this game
I unfortunately was kind of disappointed by this. Which is not to say that I think it is bad, but it just felt like something was missing compared to the main VN and after mulling over it a bit for me it comes down to what feels like the ultimate goal or purpose of the work. A lot of what I really like about the sex in Dawn Chorus is that it is full of tension, unease, a kind of excitement and perhaps most crucially the sex is never the most interesting thing going on.
Which I guess I just didn't really feel that in BH, the sex was kind of the most interesting thing and it was fine but also kind of whatever. and maybe that's all it was meant to be, a kind of nice pleasant short but there is a clear gesture towards a sort of melancholy and sadness and greater meaning which keeps it from being pleasant but also it does not really go far enough to have a real thrust or impact. It almost feels stuck in between the two ends.
Despite my criticisms I would still urge people to buy it though, because any money given to the development team is money well spent and they're doing really great stuff this one just sadly didn't really feel as good to me :(
This. I agree with everything(thought I do wish you did some formatting on your comment).
This VN doesn't understand what it's trying to be and ends up falling short in everything it does. Not a good porn VN, not a good short story, doesn't explore anything it starts exploring beyond the ankle depth...
And why is it told from no one's perspective? That's the one thing everyone expects from a VN, doubly so from the creator of Dawn Chorus, where perspective is so important and used to such great effect?
Contrary to you, however, I'd like to warn people against buying this and instead consider supporting the Dawn Chorus patreon. This is not a good VN and the more obvious it becomes to the creator - the lower is the chance they will do something similarly undercooked in near future.
Broken Harbours was in huge part an experiment in writing in third perspective in a VN and in that regards I'm happy with the result. From the literary style to more adult themes, it was meant to be very unlike Dawn Chorus. I don't agree with it not sticking to a perspective.
I agree that the smuttier side and more serious one pull the story in two directions at once and now I wish I stuck only one of these. My interests shifted between the time I wrote down the rough idea and the time I sat down to write the text, the initial plan was for a much more lighthearted story. Still, in the end I'm happy with the result, and though I wish either I toned down the smutty side or leaned only into the horniness, I think it uses the word count well and is still worth a read. It is possible but unlikely that I'll revisit it in a future to tidy it up and expand on it, once the time allows and I need a breather from working on Dawn Chorus again.
First of all, thank you for replying. You owe me nothing, so it's nice to see you take time for this.
I understand this was never meant to be like Dawn Chorus, but it wasn't obvious until after I already finished the story. It's advertised as a side story to Dawn Chorus with the same characters and that's it - you can surely see where the confusion is coming from.
And even if I went into this with full understanding of what it is - I don't think I would enjoy it. This is a very personal, intimate story of a friendship blooming and being tested by a transformation into something different, and this heart of the story is great!
BUT!
The impersonal perspective is taking away from the experience. The abundance of narrator bits is taking away from the experience. And most of all, the smut part is taking away from the experience - not because it's smut, but because it is not an organic part of the plot. It's not really pulling the story in a different direction, it's not pulling it anywhere at all, it's a plot point that's just sitting there. It's important for the story, but it's not a part of the story - it is not exploring the characters. Everything leading up to it explores the characters, the scenes after it explore the characters, but the sex scene is just there.
IATERRY said it best - sex in Dawn Chorus was done better, because it always came in a form of an emotionally charged scene, characters bloomed in them. And in BH - it has no emotional weight, just some after-thoughts attached.
I want to see Rune nervously pacing Devon's apartment, biting his lips and mindlessly eating those frozen berries, worrying if he's using his friend. I want to see Devon worry and pull away mid-sex because he's worried what he's doing is going to make him lose a friend. I want Rune and Devon to stay real people in the most important part of the story!
What I'm trying to say is... There's a good VN here, but no offense, it's under the rubble of your experimentation. With all due respect, and I do respect you a great deal as a writer, I don't think it's a success.
What is the password? I was going through the preferences and i saw kinks so initially, i tried to enable it but it asks for a password, let me just simp for my deer boy okay??
I fixed it and I've gotta say that it's beautiful, and the poem like lines fit so smooth in the VN.
*BIG BIG SPOILER*
From the title "Broken Harbours", and after playing the game, I think Devon and Rune are like the right person wrong time kind of situation, which leads to "more than friends, but not lover". Even though they spend time with each other and even do "the thing", their loneliness is still there, or I think at least it is for Rune.
After the shower, Rune decides to go home, even though Devon suggests staying with him for the night. The story does not explain about Rune much in the end so idk.
For Devon, looks like he is finding some peace with his past, and he gonna accept of what will happen between him and Rune, good or bad because it's just another page of his life.
"No ship can moor at broken harbours", this describes what happens to the both of them rn, they are not ready for a LTR yet.
Also, a daffodil means hope, but giving someone a single daffodil also means misfortune. (idk if it means anything but I'm just putting it out there)
One question is, after this story, do they actually do "the thing" more than once or is it just a one time? 🤔 (before the DC ofc)
I'd guess fwb maybe? It might even tie into the main game at some point if you pursue Devin or Rune.
I'm on mobile android, and I bought the VN but it says I need to buy it still. Any ideas on how to fix this?
I got it when it was free but I had to urgently format my pc and I forgot to back it up :c
Okay
so.
It's probably VERY unlikely, BUUTTTTTT
Is there any chance that this'll possibly become temporarily free again? like every few months theres another free weekend thing, or is that not gonna happen?
If it does, see image below. If it doesn't, see image below.
This was very very good. I lvoe the depth it added to Devon's story. I was a bit surprised at how bold and straightforward Rune was though, it didn't feel like him. But either way it was great. Still can't figure out the password though...
I loved this, especially since Rune and Devon are my two favorites from DC. I wonder how the events from this will color Rune and Devon's routes moving forward. I'm always rooting for our boy Arvo, but I'm curious to see how the previous feelings these two share will affect their opinion of Arvo. We already have seen Rune get a tad jealous during Devon's route.
My anti-virus has taken great exception to this game. The issue is; ti!7DBFBB57F808 it is on BrokenHarbours-32.exe
Please advise, thank-you
I deleted the -32 bit, it has now found a treat in python.exe ti!2068B45C960C
Please advise
try to download it through website but not in itch app
https://dawn-chorus.itch.io/brokenharbours
you are god
edit: thank you god