I'm really happy with this update, I gotta say! Getting to see more of the cast interacting with each other was nice. And that spooky event with Klaus in the woods was really interesting to see. I stayed and got the feeling it was going somewhere... interesting, before Lake interrupted.
Also, just wanna say that Rune is such a sweetheart! And so is Lake! And Devon, too!! I'm torn for getting to choose only one of them at a time! They're all just so nice!
With the first day of the camp coming to a close, I'm really interested to see where the story goes from here! As well as how our relationships with the other characters are going to develop in the coming updates.
I don't really have much in the way of critique for this update- at least, not for this update specifically. I didn't notice much in the way of typos or glaring errors this time around, so that's good! The only thing I'd really think to bring up is that the black used on the character sprites - more accurately, the black used for Rune's antlers and any black clothing like his jacket or Jorgen's poncho - comes off as too dark. In most cases, it looks less like the characters are wearing dark clothes and more like someone put the images in photoshop and cut out the clothing; basically, you can't see any detail for anything colored black in the game, with the exception of Devon. If you want to use black for a character's clothing or other details, maybe it would be better to use a shade closer to the darker parts of Devon's fur? Maybe a little darker than that even? Dark enough that we can see they're meant to black, but not so dark that we can't see any actual detail. Just a thought.
Anyways, great work over all this time around! Keep up the good work!
I definetly love it. This VN has a pleasant atmosphere, beautiful backgrounds, attractive characters ant good music. And, ofcourse, Lake - my favorite character, lively and hadsome, I liked his CG very much, not because it shows him naked, but because his designe and expression.
I was playing the visual novel all over again getting myself ready for the next update and I just realised... are Klaus and Travis going to have a route?
I am in love with the wholesome, warm milk, slow burn, campfire. (Did i add enough descriptors?) type of feel this game has. I'll be watching it closely. :3
So far, amazing story. I enjoy the art, the theme, and the scenery. I have a tiny set back which is no problem to anything other than being an American, I do not mean to offend anyone... I am nitpicking because I'm bored and overly flustered.
Anyway, to my point, the acceptance of nudity is just so jarring, heh, because there are called private parts. private parts. Like I enjoy putting myself in the character's shoes, and it just feels unreal to walk around others with junk flying around.
Like with rune, he is flirting with you, getting nice and gushy, boom instant peen right in the open, which seems unreal because an erection -
is like the gateway to what the mind desires, so in this scenario, you go walking out if anyone sees, your completely stiff member. With a guy following right after, it's so sus.
Maybe that's normal there, but jeez if I went there id be covered 24/7, "he had no swim trunks" underwear are fabric swim trunks, and then you could go commando later.
Dunno, the openness of nudity is just awkward for me, causing me to get so flustered and embarrassed I have to pause, kinda sorta scared about what's next.
Other than the openness of nudity, it's overall a lovely story and I love it so far, but I will now avoid the pool and sauna =//3//=
this is a suggestion, an opinion, a thought.
Honestly, if the person who made this I have a suggestion, what if you made an alternative route with where you can wear your underwear to the pool and then go commando later. Have it meet up, I just keep reading about how it's ok and normal when it can be an option. Like remove talking so much about how it's normal or ok, and have the choice of wearing it anyways, for some comfort for some American readers, since it's seen as bazaar like the coach's reaction. I know that its set where it is set. I just dont see the point in it. I understand adding more routes makes it harder and extends the amount of time to update, just wear some undies ;v; no nakies, untill readies!
All new sprites would be added at the same time to keep the style consistent. We're probably going to post the new ones on Patreon earlier, but sadly I don't know when hq will have enough time to start working on them :c
I can't wait to see the new sprites :3 my hype is killing me lol. I have a good feeling about the new sprites ^^ I'm extremely sure that they will be awesome, Dawn Chorus is being really awesome
So I have a little theory, I remember that at first when Arvo is going to take a picture from the view outside the window he used to say something like "can't help but Imagine Lake staring at the sky with his big green eyes" but Lake's eyes are red, Rune's eyes are green and apparently Rune plays basketball which in my opinion Lake looks very basketball player so my theory is... Could it be that Rune and Lake's roles have been swapped? I'm probably wrong but I wanted to ask anyway.
Yeah I bet it's just a writing mistake, but stuff like that happens sometimes. Like maybe his idea at first was that Rune the basketball player was the lion and Lake the dork was the deer but in the last minute he decided to swap sprites. Idk it's like everything kinda makes sense... the eyes color thing, their body shape etc so I wanted to ask. But I also think I'm reading too much into it lol
That text for the first demo was written before we've had the sprites and even final designs for the characters, so only after those were done I went through all the scenes and changed the descriptions. The one with green eyes slipped under the radar for quite a long time, though :D
since this is set in norway, in my head I said Lake like how I imagine my danish friend would say it like.... lakə lmao. now to find out it's the actual english word I feel like a clown
Hey I was wondering, every character has a picture like it was taken by the main character with his camera except for Devon and Mikko so I was thinking, will you guys actually make Devon and Mikko's pic too?
Current sprites are beta, hq is currently experimenting with styles and we want to make them fluffier. We might keep some of them and change the rest, though, we're not sure yet.
No, only new content was added. For now we are focusing on letting the players get to know the whole cast, so we're writing short scenes, only at the end of Day 1 there will be a split into proper routes.
I love the game so much i know It's new but man i just can't wait to play more Coach Devon and Rune seem to be the one's I like the most so far. They seem to care about the MC even though they just mat. The story so far is 100% top tier and I just can't wait to see the game get bigger and better. Keep up the awesome work and always be you when making such a awesome game and in life to.
All right... I admit, I thought this visual novel would be uninteresting. I was so damn wrong <3
This is just a Demo, the beginning of the whole story, and I already want to know what will happen next. The art is excellent, a style I have never seen before, and I am ready to admit that it is very beautiful. Keep it up, guys. I'm sure you'll do it.
Sorry, if I've made some mistakes, English isn't my native language ;w;
We don't yet want to promise anything, as we might have to scale the project down in the future, which we of course don't want to do. For now there are plans for routes for Rune, Devon, Bjørn, Lake, Mikko, Tyra and Jørgen, but everything is subject to change, depending on the results of the survey and our funding .
The only complaint I have about the new build is that the game still describes Lake's eyes as green... Admittedly, I feel more bothered by that than I should, but am otherwise impressed with the game! Great work!
You're right, I don't know how did it slip unnoticed for so long! I've added it to the list of corrections for the next update, thank you for pointing that out :)
Yes, if you find any, please let me know. We do have a proofreader, but they haven't gone through all of the text, and even they might not notice some mistakes. We have created a survey for any providing feedback and pointing out mistakes, it can be accessed here: https://forms.gle/SE5DnRkcuvJoCR6b8
I would have mentioned it in my post about the previous build, but the grammar was a bit confusing and I thought it might be referring to Rune, so I didn't say anything ¯\_(ヅ)_/¯
I like to leave detailed comments when new builds are released for a game, so I'll be sure to mention any glaring or especially confusing grammatical errors, typos, etc that manage to slip through from update to update. Always happy to lend a helping hand!
Finally we can see what Arvo is like, he is super cute and very handsome, I really liked his design, I fell in love with him. Devon is very cute too, the art on this Vn is just phenomenal and the music is excellent. I like how the story unfolds and I look forward to what awaits us in future updates. Many congratulations for the excellent work on this Vn. *hugs and licks* =^.^=
Routes will start later, most of the first day will be dedicated to getting to know the characters, so not necessarily ^^ Choices made now will affect future events, though.
Ooh okay, so I guess it's like if I wanna play Lake's route and have the best events I should start from the begging and pick every option that involves Lake, I really love that :3
Great update by the way ;3 I'm enjoying the visual novel a lot ^ω^
I must say, this game was certainly an unexpected find, but I'm very glad that I found it! I can see quite a bit of potential here and I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes.
So far this game seems pretty well written aside from the occasional typo or grammatical error. Also, the characters all come across as interesting, like there's more to see from them than just what's on the surface. It'll be nice to see these characters interact with each other and how their personalities will mesh together.
There might not be much here yet, but this game has definitely caught my attention and I'll certainly be keeping an eye on it from here on!
We want to fill the visual novel with special moments of various kinds, and yes, we want to commission CGs for the game, currently we're in the process of negotiations with an interested artist.
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I'm really happy with this update, I gotta say! Getting to see more of the cast interacting with each other was nice. And that spooky event with Klaus in the woods was really interesting to see. I stayed and got the feeling it was going somewhere... interesting, before Lake interrupted.
Also, just wanna say that Rune is such a sweetheart! And so is Lake! And Devon, too!! I'm torn for getting to choose only one of them at a time! They're all just so nice!
With the first day of the camp coming to a close, I'm really interested to see where the story goes from here! As well as how our relationships with the other characters are going to develop in the coming updates.
I don't really have much in the way of critique for this update- at least, not for this update specifically. I didn't notice much in the way of typos or glaring errors this time around, so that's good! The only thing I'd really think to bring up is that the black used on the character sprites - more accurately, the black used for Rune's antlers and any black clothing like his jacket or Jorgen's poncho - comes off as too dark. In most cases, it looks less like the characters are wearing dark clothes and more like someone put the images in photoshop and cut out the clothing; basically, you can't see any detail for anything colored black in the game, with the exception of Devon. If you want to use black for a character's clothing or other details, maybe it would be better to use a shade closer to the darker parts of Devon's fur? Maybe a little darker than that even? Dark enough that we can see they're meant to black, but not so dark that we can't see any actual detail. Just a thought.
Anyways, great work over all this time around! Keep up the good work!
Great VN. My favorites are Devon, Rune and Torulf. Can't wait to see more of their routes. Keep up the good work.
Oh my gosh. I got most interested in the coach cause i liked his eyes initially and then the character...and we're both from Ohio. Go figure. lol
I definetly love it. This VN has a pleasant atmosphere, beautiful backgrounds, attractive characters ant good music. And, ofcourse, Lake - my favorite character, lively and hadsome, I liked his CG very much, not because it shows him naked, but because his designe and expression.
Waiting for v0.4 to go public tomorrow like:
Didnt play this yet but i feel like the deer is gonna be my favorite character lol.
Edit: I was right. Im really interested in this game now.
I was playing the visual novel all over again getting myself ready for the next update and I just realised... are Klaus and Travis going to have a route?
Right now there are no plans for that as not many people voted for them in the survey, but it might change in the future!
Daaww... but Travis is a cutie :c
When is 0.4 scheduled for public release?
7.11 :)
Is the teacher gonna be a route ? 0:
Yes :)
ok tysm your vn is very good !!! <3
I am in love with the wholesome, warm milk, slow burn, campfire. (Did i add enough descriptors?) type of feel this game has. I'll be watching it closely. :3
Friendly advice. Adding a bigger map of the whole installations would be better. More impressive to know what the whole place would look like
Maybe some spoilers.
So far, amazing story. I enjoy the art, the theme, and the scenery. I have a tiny set back which is no problem to anything other than being an American, I do not mean to offend anyone... I am nitpicking because I'm bored and overly flustered.
Anyway, to my point, the acceptance of nudity is just so jarring, heh, because there are called private parts. private parts. Like I enjoy putting myself in the character's shoes, and it just feels unreal to walk around others with junk flying around.
Like with rune, he is flirting with you, getting nice and gushy, boom instant peen right in the open, which seems unreal because an
erection-is like the gateway to what the mind desires, so in this scenario, you go walking out if anyone sees, your completely stiff member. With a guy following right after, it's so sus.
Maybe that's normal there, but jeez if I went there id be covered 24/7, "he had no swim trunks" underwear are fabric swim trunks, and then you could go commando later.
Dunno, the openness of nudity is just awkward for me, causing me to get so flustered and embarrassed I have to pause, kinda sorta scared about what's next.
Other than the openness of nudity, it's overall a lovely story and I love it so far, but I will now avoid the pool and sauna =//3//=
this is a suggestion, an opinion, a thought.
Honestly, if the person who made this I have a suggestion, what if you made an alternative route with where you can wear your underwear to the pool and then go commando later. Have it meet up, I just keep reading about how it's ok and normal when it can be an option. Like remove talking so much about how it's normal or ok, and have the choice of wearing it anyways, for some comfort for some American readers, since it's seen as bazaar like the coach's reaction. I know that its set where it is set. I just dont see the point in it. I understand adding more routes makes it harder and extends the amount of time to update, just wear some undies ;v; no nakies, untill readies!
How do u get rune's cg?
You need to talk with Rune during lunch, and then let him help you later.
Will you add the new sprites as they are finished? Or will you wait to have all the characters finished to add them all at the same time in the VN?
All new sprites would be added at the same time to keep the style consistent. We're probably going to post the new ones on Patreon earlier, but sadly I don't know when hq will have enough time to start working on them :c
I can't wait to see the new sprites :3 my hype is killing me lol. I have a good feeling about the new sprites ^^ I'm extremely sure that they will be awesome, Dawn Chorus is being really awesome
wait is this a bl visual novel or something else
...sort of? I think you could call it that.
Check my profile for more of the same stuff ;)
So I have a little theory, I remember that at first when Arvo is going to take a picture from the view outside the window he used to say something like "can't help but Imagine Lake staring at the sky with his big green eyes" but Lake's eyes are red, Rune's eyes are green and apparently Rune plays basketball which in my opinion Lake looks very basketball player so my theory is... Could it be that Rune and Lake's roles have been swapped? I'm probably wrong but I wanted to ask anyway.
Yeah I bet it's just a writing mistake, but stuff like that happens sometimes. Like maybe his idea at first was that Rune the basketball player was the lion and Lake the dork was the deer but in the last minute he decided to swap sprites. Idk it's like everything kinda makes sense... the eyes color thing, their body shape etc so I wanted to ask. But I also think I'm reading too much into it lol
That text for the first demo was written before we've had the sprites and even final designs for the characters, so only after those were done I went through all the scenes and changed the descriptions. The one with green eyes slipped under the radar for quite a long time, though :D
since this is set in norway, in my head I said Lake like how I imagine my danish friend would say it like.... lakə lmao. now to find out it's the actual english word I feel like a clown
for me the name+story looks e bit like an easteregg. reminded me on dr. who and river song
Hey I was wondering, every character has a picture like it was taken by the main character with his camera except for Devon and Mikko so I was thinking, will you guys actually make Devon and Mikko's pic too?
Mikko's picture exists, but somehow we didn't upload it anywhere, I'm not sure why myself. I might inquire hq about a one for Devon, though!
Oh I had no idea that Mikko's picture exists hahaha. I'm looking forward to see Devon and Mikko's picture ^^
Also out of curiosity, do you guys plan to add expressions for the boys?
Yes, absolutely! It's possible that they will be redrawn first, but again, I have to wait for hq with that and they're a bit busy with work lately.
Redraw them? Is there something you want to change on them? Or it's more like the current sprites are beta sprites so to speak
Current sprites are beta, hq is currently experimenting with styles and we want to make them fluffier. We might keep some of them and change the rest, though, we're not sure yet.
Lake is so cute
Great to see more stuff with Lake! Shame that we're probably not going to able to share his room though...
Don't let your hopes down yet :)
What routes have been updated? Rune and Devon?
This time all of them! :)
The update on Devon and Rune's routes felt very short... Did you do changes from the beginning too? Do I have to re-start again?
No, only new content was added. For now we are focusing on letting the players get to know the whole cast, so we're writing short scenes, only at the end of Day 1 there will be a split into proper routes.
Oh, okay. Good to know. Can't wait for more! :)
I feel like the sprites should be changed to the cg art for consistency cg art looks overall better than the sprites do
The sprites will be redrawn at some point, but likely again by our sprite artist, hq.
I prefer the sprite art style :) enjoying the more cutesy art style
hey wondering how long the waiting period is going to be for updates
Hi! The next update will be released for patrons this weekend, then publicly on itch.io two weeks later. Updates are released monthly.
I love the game so much i know It's new but man i just can't wait to play more Coach Devon and Rune seem to be the one's I like the most so far. They seem to care about the MC even though they just mat. The story so far is 100% top tier and I just can't wait to see the game get bigger and better. Keep up the awesome work and always be you when making such a awesome game and in life to.
Is there a image of Rune because there is an image at the top that says "that should do it...……….." is that going to be in or is it already in.
It is in the visual novel already! You need to talk with Rune during lunch, and then let him help you later.
I just got up to it lol I feel like an idiot now.
All right... I admit, I thought this visual novel would be uninteresting. I was so damn wrong <3
This is just a Demo, the beginning of the whole story, and I already want to know what will happen next. The art is excellent, a style I have never seen before, and I am ready to admit that it is very beautiful. Keep it up, guys. I'm sure you'll do it.
Sorry, if I've made some mistakes, English isn't my native language ;w;
P.S. Rune's verrrry handsome, mlem~
Which characters are going to have a route?
We don't yet want to promise anything, as we might have to scale the project down in the future, which we of course don't want to do. For now there are plans for routes for Rune, Devon, Bjørn, Lake, Mikko, Tyra and Jørgen, but everything is subject to change, depending on the results of the survey and our funding .
Are Klaus and Travis not options currently?
I was about to ask if the teacher would have a route but now I know that there is a plan for him which makes me happy.
Do you have/are you planning to have a Patreon?
Yes ^^ link is here: https://www.patreon.com/DawnChorusVN
The only complaint I have about the new build is that the game still describes Lake's eyes as green... Admittedly, I feel more bothered by that than I should, but am otherwise impressed with the game! Great work!
You're right, I don't know how did it slip unnoticed for so long! I've added it to the list of corrections for the next update, thank you for pointing that out :)
so you want us to let you know if we find typos and errors? I found a few but I wasn't sure if I should point them out or not
Yes, if you find any, please let me know. We do have a proofreader, but they haven't gone through all of the text, and even they might not notice some mistakes.
We have created a survey for any providing feedback and pointing out mistakes, it can be accessed here: https://forms.gle/SE5DnRkcuvJoCR6b8
You're very welcome! I'm happy to be of help!
I would have mentioned it in my post about the previous build, but the grammar was a bit confusing and I thought it might be referring to Rune, so I didn't say anything ¯\_(ヅ)_/¯
I like to leave detailed comments when new builds are released for a game, so I'll be sure to mention any glaring or especially confusing grammatical errors, typos, etc that manage to slip through from update to update. Always happy to lend a helping hand!
Finally we can see what Arvo is like, he is super cute and very handsome, I really liked his design, I fell in love with him. Devon is very cute too, the art on this Vn is just phenomenal and the music is excellent. I like how the story unfolds and I look forward to what awaits us in future updates. Many congratulations for the excellent work on this Vn. *hugs and licks* =^.^=
Don't worry about Rune, there is still time for that, but first he needs to get to know the main character better :)
yeah im just so excited about this game xD, and also do you have any upload schedule or are the updates random ?
Right now updates are uploaded first for Patreon patrons on every second weekend of the month, and two weeks after that for the public.
Who is the artist who made the scene with Arvo and Rune when the jacket thing? His art style is so familiar, I've seen it before for sure
It's Tintiai, he will also be drawing the next CGs for Dawn Chorus.
https://twitter.com/tintiai
I think he should be the one doing the regular sprites too. His style is amazing.
Very nice update! I'm torn between Rune and Lake, they're both so sweet!
Possible spoiler
When you pick to go ask Devon about the key, is that a way to start Devon's route?
Routes will start later, most of the first day will be dedicated to getting to know the characters, so not necessarily ^^ Choices made now will affect future events, though.
Ooh okay, so I guess it's like if I wanna play Lake's route and have the best events I should start from the begging and pick every option that involves Lake, I really love that :3
Great update by the way ;3 I'm enjoying the visual novel a lot ^ω^
Does Coach Devon has any update in the new update? And if not, when will he be unlocked to be romanced?
Yes! There is new Coach Devon content in this update.
Wonderful! How can I access it?
When looking for the key you have to choose an option to go ask Coach Devon for help
Oh, okay. Thank you! :)
By the way, what species is Coach Devon?
He's a melanistic jaguar, known widely as black panther :)
I must say, this game was certainly an unexpected find, but I'm very glad that I found it! I can see quite a bit of potential here and I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes.
So far this game seems pretty well written aside from the occasional typo or grammatical error. Also, the characters all come across as interesting, like there's more to see from them than just what's on the surface. It'll be nice to see these characters interact with each other and how their personalities will mesh together.
There might not be much here yet, but this game has definitely caught my attention and I'll certainly be keeping an eye on it from here on!
Will there be scenes at the "special" moments too?
We want to fill the visual novel with special moments of various kinds, and yes, we want to commission CGs for the game, currently we're in the process of negotiations with an interested artist.