OK, I think I've said before that Mikko is my favorite since... I'm a sucker for Childhood friendship love... But is it me or did his species change? I dunno why but I think he was an otter last build... Maybe I'm just tripping, I love him regardless
Yep, Miko did change species, they mentioned it in the 0.5 changelog (I'm not entirely sure what from and what to, but I've never been good at guessing character species)
I really loved the new update! I'm really immersed into the story, and love the atmosphere in it! Mikko's new sprite is absolutely adorable, and all the CGs I found were very cute as well! I squealed a bit when I saw the CG with Arvo and Torulf, it's so freaking adorable-
I've been waiting for this moment since the first time I played DC five months ago. Finally I can choose Lake as my number 1. Oh, by the way, good cliffhanger, I'm intrigued, because, as you have said, 0.6 will content first NSFW scene. I doubt that it will be about Telescope and Uranus, but still, I'm looking forward for that moment.
Can't wait to see more of this game <3 Also i need to ask is Torulf muscular or not? His sprite looks like he's not but CG suggests he is. Keep up the good work <3
From what I've seen so far the game is a superb thing to play, I'm going to recommend it to some friends but first I would just like to ask, is there any NSFW content in it?
I cant wait to see more of this i haven't gone down every possible choice yet but lake is a fast favorite for me. I cant wait to see what this turns in to in the future!
Wait, isnt Devon the coach? I mean im all for our star to fall in love while he is on his trip, but with the coach? Miiiiight be slipping into dodgy territory if you head down that route. Just a thought - I love what you have done so far, I'd love to be able to produce something as polished as what you have done!
We're aware that it's a sensitive topic, but that's specifically why we wanted to tackle it. We're committed to do it in a tasteful way, but still, this will not be a route for everyone.
Lol, don't get me wrong, we will be playing every route to see what happens!!! I mean, you guys have done a fantastic job so far, so I am sure you will handle it well :)
So, I played the first 30 minutes of the visual novel and I can tell a lot of work has gone into this project. I really hope you guys continue on producing this kind of art because there isn't enough of this.
However, I feel like the introduction and the dialogue has some issues. The main character spends most of the introduction naval gazing and describing inconsequential scenery. He feels like a blank slate most of the time and his interactions with other people feel hollow. Furthermore, some of the other characters are introduced via montage, this is just straight up exposition.
Like I said, I can appreciate the amount of work that has gone into this project and I wish ya'll the best for this.
Hi! Thank you for comment, critique like that is much appreciated.
Could you tell me what do you mean when you say that MC's interactions feel hollow? I have a guess, but I'd like to be sure.
About a sizeable amount of descriptions of surroundings and introspection, I intended the game to have a slower, relaxed pace to reflect the peaceful setting and more introverted nature of Nordic people, and be more realistic/lifelike than an average furry visual novel. I've heard a lot of good feedback about it, but I understand that it might be off-putting for people who prefer more action.
I agree that introducing the characters via montage might feel forced. This was the case for two characters, so I could show events that happened before the camp. I haven't heard bad feedback about it yet, but I might try thinking of a better way of doing that in some future update.
By hollow, I mainly mean that nothing seems to be added by any of the interactions the MC has. Given, I haven't played through the whole vn yet, and I'm mostly speaking about the first thirty minutes to hour of gameplay. On the bus, the MC gives a whole exposition about his first noticing of Mikko in vivid detail, even though in a previous sentence, he remarks he "came to Norway to cut myself from it, not to keep thinking about it." The MC basically tells and doesn't show the audience that there is something troubling Mikko, and further interactions on the bus and at the lunch table don't provide much insight into that plot point- just his shyness which we already garnered from the MC's memories.
Furthermore, the interaction with Lake in the hallway is a little weird. Weird in the sense that the MC describes him as 'timid but intense', but reading his dialogue doesn't hint at any intensity. I'm not sure if this was sarcasm on the MC's part, but it just kinda left me confused. The interaction didn't hint at anything wrong, yet the MC reports that he looked 'taken aback', without any physical or other descriptors.
I feel like if the introduction to these characters weren't as heavily put into flashbacks, the interactions with the MC would feel more weighty because we would be shown the characters and not told. I'm noticing a trend in that a lot of the character's quirks or personality traits are just told to us and not expressed through dialogue or descriptions. The characters have their own wants and needs, like Mikko being shy and with something bothering him, or Lake with withholding a question, but the MC doesn't seem to want anything other than cute boys. Which, given by how goddamn cute they are is definitely a worthy goal. I really like Lake.
Thanks for being open to criticism, I really respect that you are willing to listen to feedback. Thanks again.
This is really helpful, thank you a lot for that! There's a lot I have to remember about when writing, and being a beginner I sometimes I forget about even the basic stuff and revert to overly simplistic style. You're definitely right, I tend to tell instead of showing and I have to remind myself more often to avoid that. I hope that I will have enough time to go through the beginning of the vn to correct that and possibly rewrite some parts for the December update (it will be a pretty important one!)
Hello! I'm having trouble finding where I can give this a five star rating! Can anyone please point me in the right direction? I feel so silly. I've rated one other work, but can't find the option again. 😅
I'm really happy with this update, I gotta say! Getting to see more of the cast interacting with each other was nice. And that spooky event with Klaus in the woods was really interesting to see. I stayed and got the feeling it was going somewhere... interesting, before Lake interrupted.
Also, just wanna say that Rune is such a sweetheart! And so is Lake! And Devon, too!! I'm torn for getting to choose only one of them at a time! They're all just so nice!
With the first day of the camp coming to a close, I'm really interested to see where the story goes from here! As well as how our relationships with the other characters are going to develop in the coming updates.
I don't really have much in the way of critique for this update- at least, not for this update specifically. I didn't notice much in the way of typos or glaring errors this time around, so that's good! The only thing I'd really think to bring up is that the black used on the character sprites - more accurately, the black used for Rune's antlers and any black clothing like his jacket or Jorgen's poncho - comes off as too dark. In most cases, it looks less like the characters are wearing dark clothes and more like someone put the images in photoshop and cut out the clothing; basically, you can't see any detail for anything colored black in the game, with the exception of Devon. If you want to use black for a character's clothing or other details, maybe it would be better to use a shade closer to the darker parts of Devon's fur? Maybe a little darker than that even? Dark enough that we can see they're meant to black, but not so dark that we can't see any actual detail. Just a thought.
Anyways, great work over all this time around! Keep up the good work!
I definetly love it. This VN has a pleasant atmosphere, beautiful backgrounds, attractive characters ant good music. And, ofcourse, Lake - my favorite character, lively and hadsome, I liked his CG very much, not because it shows him naked, but because his designe and expression.
I was playing the visual novel all over again getting myself ready for the next update and I just realised... are Klaus and Travis going to have a route?
I am in love with the wholesome, warm milk, slow burn, campfire. (Did i add enough descriptors?) type of feel this game has. I'll be watching it closely. :3
So far, amazing story. I enjoy the art, the theme, and the scenery. I have a tiny set back which is no problem to anything other than being an American, I do not mean to offend anyone... I am nitpicking because I'm bored and overly flustered.
Anyway, to my point, the acceptance of nudity is just so jarring, heh, because there are called private parts. private parts. Like I enjoy putting myself in the character's shoes, and it just feels unreal to walk around others with junk flying around.
Like with rune, he is flirting with you, getting nice and gushy, boom instant peen right in the open, which seems unreal because an erection -
is like the gateway to what the mind desires, so in this scenario, you go walking out if anyone sees, your completely stiff member. With a guy following right after, it's so sus.
Maybe that's normal there, but jeez if I went there id be covered 24/7, "he had no swim trunks" underwear are fabric swim trunks, and then you could go commando later.
Dunno, the openness of nudity is just awkward for me, causing me to get so flustered and embarrassed I have to pause, kinda sorta scared about what's next.
Other than the openness of nudity, it's overall a lovely story and I love it so far, but I will now avoid the pool and sauna =//3//=
this is a suggestion, an opinion, a thought.
Honestly, if the person who made this I have a suggestion, what if you made an alternative route with where you can wear your underwear to the pool and then go commando later. Have it meet up, I just keep reading about how it's ok and normal when it can be an option. Like remove talking so much about how it's normal or ok, and have the choice of wearing it anyways, for some comfort for some American readers, since it's seen as bazaar like the coach's reaction. I know that its set where it is set. I just dont see the point in it. I understand adding more routes makes it harder and extends the amount of time to update, just wear some undies ;v; no nakies, untill readies!
All new sprites would be added at the same time to keep the style consistent. We're probably going to post the new ones on Patreon earlier, but sadly I don't know when hq will have enough time to start working on them :c
I can't wait to see the new sprites :3 my hype is killing me lol. I have a good feeling about the new sprites ^^ I'm extremely sure that they will be awesome, Dawn Chorus is being really awesome
So I have a little theory, I remember that at first when Arvo is going to take a picture from the view outside the window he used to say something like "can't help but Imagine Lake staring at the sky with his big green eyes" but Lake's eyes are red, Rune's eyes are green and apparently Rune plays basketball which in my opinion Lake looks very basketball player so my theory is... Could it be that Rune and Lake's roles have been swapped? I'm probably wrong but I wanted to ask anyway.
Yeah I bet it's just a writing mistake, but stuff like that happens sometimes. Like maybe his idea at first was that Rune the basketball player was the lion and Lake the dork was the deer but in the last minute he decided to swap sprites. Idk it's like everything kinda makes sense... the eyes color thing, their body shape etc so I wanted to ask. But I also think I'm reading too much into it lol
That text for the first demo was written before we've had the sprites and even final designs for the characters, so only after those were done I went through all the scenes and changed the descriptions. The one with green eyes slipped under the radar for quite a long time, though :D
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OK, I think I've said before that Mikko is my favorite since... I'm a sucker for Childhood friendship love... But is it me or did his species change? I dunno why but I think he was an otter last build... Maybe I'm just tripping, I love him regardless
Also, i love piano so that's another win
Yeah, I believe Mikko's species changed as well, considering his tail mostly, but I'm not entirely sure
And yeah I love piano too! Mikko's definitely one of my favourites-
Yep, Miko did change species, they mentioned it in the 0.5 changelog (I'm not entirely sure what from and what to, but I've never been good at guessing character species)
What animal is the mc?
Tiger I believe
Is the coach a love interest?
Yes!
Great update. Really loved.
However, there seems to be a problem with the survey as I get an error when I try to open it from the game.
Apparently some Google services are down at the moment, so the survey should be available after that gets resolved.
Latest update is fantastic! SO worth the wait!
I really loved the new update! I'm really immersed into the story, and love the atmosphere in it! Mikko's new sprite is absolutely adorable, and all the CGs I found were very cute as well! I squealed a bit when I saw the CG with Arvo and Torulf, it's so freaking adorable-
I'm eagerly waiting for the next update!
The end of the update ended on a friggin cliffhanger..
I can't say i'm mad because I love this game so i'm not mad just disappointed inhale and a little sad at the same time but…
I still love you very much..
Edit: I also really liked the new model for Mikko. Very cute 12/10
I am in love with this VN!!
The artstyle is amazing, the characters are all so adorable and I really like the story!
I can't wait to see more of this. Keep up the great work!
Have any of the routes been updated?
I've been waiting for this moment since the first time I played DC five months ago. Finally I can choose Lake as my number 1. Oh, by the way, good cliffhanger, I'm intrigued, because, as you have said, 0.6 will content first NSFW scene. I doubt that it will be about Telescope and Uranus, but still, I'm looking forward for that moment.
HhhhhHhhhh Just two more days for me and in dying out of excitement and me not being able to wait for the update
is it scheduled to update in 2 days?
one more dayyy
I can't waaaiiiiiit giiimmiiiiiie
Can't wait to see more of this game <3 Also i need to ask is Torulf muscular or not? His sprite looks like he's not but CG suggests he is. Keep up the good work <3
He's fit and he works out, but he isn't really muscular. His reworked sprite will reflect that better (once it gets drawn!)
Just a quick questio, will the future updates focus on one character, or will each month build have different characters update?
With the amount of routes we have it would be unreasonable to have updates focused only on one character.
nice
I worded things a bit harshly, but I am still available if you would like to contact me on Twitter @InvokingA
If Twitter doesn't work for you, I can drop my email or we can work something else out.
From what I've seen so far the game is a superb thing to play, I'm going to recommend it to some friends but first I would just like to ask, is there any NSFW content in it?
Hi! Not really at the moment, first upcoming nsfw scene is planned for the update v0.6. Since v0.5 there's a toggle to switch sfw mode in preferences.
And thank you :)
I cant wait to see more of this i haven't gone down every possible choice yet but lake is a fast favorite for me. I cant wait to see what this turns in to in the future!
How to get the picture of the other Tiger with the strawberry blonde hair cuddling with the protagonist on the couch?
If I remember correctly, when given the choice, go to the common room and choose to sit on the same couch as Torulf. You'll get that scene afterwards.
We don't want to promise anything yet, but our current plan is for Rune, Lake, Mikko, Torulf, Bjørn, Devon and Jørgen to have their own routes.
Wait, isnt Devon the coach? I mean im all for our star to fall in love while he is on his trip, but with the coach? Miiiiight be slipping into dodgy territory if you head down that route. Just a thought - I love what you have done so far, I'd love to be able to produce something as polished as what you have done!
they're in a college/university so I don't think it'd be anything illegal if that's what your worried about. That and Torulf is like 27 I think?
We're aware that it's a sensitive topic, but that's specifically why we wanted to tackle it. We're committed to do it in a tasteful way, but still, this will not be a route for everyone.
Lol, don't get me wrong, we will be playing every route to see what happens!!! I mean, you guys have done a fantastic job so far, so I am sure you will handle it well :)
Whats up,
So, I played the first 30 minutes of the visual novel and I can tell a lot of work has gone into this project. I really hope you guys continue on producing this kind of art because there isn't enough of this.
However, I feel like the introduction and the dialogue has some issues. The main character spends most of the introduction naval gazing and describing inconsequential scenery. He feels like a blank slate most of the time and his interactions with other people feel hollow. Furthermore, some of the other characters are introduced via montage, this is just straight up exposition.
Like I said, I can appreciate the amount of work that has gone into this project and I wish ya'll the best for this.
Hi! Thank you for comment, critique like that is much appreciated.
Could you tell me what do you mean when you say that MC's interactions feel hollow? I have a guess, but I'd like to be sure.
About a sizeable amount of descriptions of surroundings and introspection, I intended the game to have a slower, relaxed pace to reflect the peaceful setting and more introverted nature of Nordic people, and be more realistic/lifelike than an average furry visual novel. I've heard a lot of good feedback about it, but I understand that it might be off-putting for people who prefer more action.
I agree that introducing the characters via montage might feel forced. This was the case for two characters, so I could show events that happened before the camp. I haven't heard bad feedback about it yet, but I might try thinking of a better way of doing that in some future update.
- Keo
Oh man, I wasn't expecting a reply back.
By hollow, I mainly mean that nothing seems to be added by any of the interactions the MC has. Given, I haven't played through the whole vn yet, and I'm mostly speaking about the first thirty minutes to hour of gameplay. On the bus, the MC gives a whole exposition about his first noticing of Mikko in vivid detail, even though in a previous sentence, he remarks he "came to Norway to cut myself from it, not to keep thinking about it." The MC basically tells and doesn't show the audience that there is something troubling Mikko, and further interactions on the bus and at the lunch table don't provide much insight into that plot point- just his shyness which we already garnered from the MC's memories.
Furthermore, the interaction with Lake in the hallway is a little weird. Weird in the sense that the MC describes him as 'timid but intense', but reading his dialogue doesn't hint at any intensity. I'm not sure if this was sarcasm on the MC's part, but it just kinda left me confused. The interaction didn't hint at anything wrong, yet the MC reports that he looked 'taken aback', without any physical or other descriptors.
I feel like if the introduction to these characters weren't as heavily put into flashbacks, the interactions with the MC would feel more weighty because we would be shown the characters and not told. I'm noticing a trend in that a lot of the character's quirks or personality traits are just told to us and not expressed through dialogue or descriptions. The characters have their own wants and needs, like Mikko being shy and with something bothering him, or Lake with withholding a question, but the MC doesn't seem to want anything other than cute boys.
Which, given by how goddamn cute they are is definitely a worthy goal.I really like Lake.Thanks for being open to criticism, I really respect that you are willing to listen to feedback. Thanks again.
This is really helpful, thank you a lot for that! There's a lot I have to remember about when writing, and being a beginner I sometimes I forget about even the basic stuff and revert to overly simplistic style. You're definitely right, I tend to tell instead of showing and I have to remind myself more often to avoid that. I hope that I will have enough time to go through the beginning of the vn to correct that and possibly rewrite some parts for the December update (it will be a pretty important one!)
-Keo
Hi!
I just played the game and for something that has just started a little over three months ago THIS IS AMAZING!
I just wanna say that I'll he looking forward to more of this amazing gake in the future! ^^
this gets a definite 5/5★ from me, If I could give a 6 I would hehe
And I really love the character designs, I hope you have good health! and remember, Dony overdo yourself ok? 😉
(Edit: Mikko is definitely my fay, I'm a sucker for childhoon love, Hehe...)
With love, Your dear supporter:
-Ace Ayasaki
Hello! I'm having trouble finding where I can give this a five star rating! Can anyone please point me in the right direction? I feel so silly. I've rated one other work, but can't find the option again. 😅
I'm really happy with this update, I gotta say! Getting to see more of the cast interacting with each other was nice. And that spooky event with Klaus in the woods was really interesting to see. I stayed and got the feeling it was going somewhere... interesting, before Lake interrupted.
Also, just wanna say that Rune is such a sweetheart! And so is Lake! And Devon, too!! I'm torn for getting to choose only one of them at a time! They're all just so nice!
With the first day of the camp coming to a close, I'm really interested to see where the story goes from here! As well as how our relationships with the other characters are going to develop in the coming updates.
I don't really have much in the way of critique for this update- at least, not for this update specifically. I didn't notice much in the way of typos or glaring errors this time around, so that's good! The only thing I'd really think to bring up is that the black used on the character sprites - more accurately, the black used for Rune's antlers and any black clothing like his jacket or Jorgen's poncho - comes off as too dark. In most cases, it looks less like the characters are wearing dark clothes and more like someone put the images in photoshop and cut out the clothing; basically, you can't see any detail for anything colored black in the game, with the exception of Devon. If you want to use black for a character's clothing or other details, maybe it would be better to use a shade closer to the darker parts of Devon's fur? Maybe a little darker than that even? Dark enough that we can see they're meant to black, but not so dark that we can't see any actual detail. Just a thought.
Anyways, great work over all this time around! Keep up the good work!
Great VN. My favorites are Devon, Rune and Torulf. Can't wait to see more of their routes. Keep up the good work.
Oh my gosh. I got most interested in the coach cause i liked his eyes initially and then the character...and we're both from Ohio. Go figure. lol
I definetly love it. This VN has a pleasant atmosphere, beautiful backgrounds, attractive characters ant good music. And, ofcourse, Lake - my favorite character, lively and hadsome, I liked his CG very much, not because it shows him naked, but because his designe and expression.
Waiting for v0.4 to go public tomorrow like:
Didnt play this yet but i feel like the deer is gonna be my favorite character lol.
Edit: I was right. Im really interested in this game now.
I was playing the visual novel all over again getting myself ready for the next update and I just realised... are Klaus and Travis going to have a route?
Right now there are no plans for that as not many people voted for them in the survey, but it might change in the future!
Daaww... but Travis is a cutie :c
When is 0.4 scheduled for public release?
7.11 :)
Is the teacher gonna be a route ? 0:
Yes :)
ok tysm your vn is very good !!! <3
I am in love with the wholesome, warm milk, slow burn, campfire. (Did i add enough descriptors?) type of feel this game has. I'll be watching it closely. :3
Friendly advice. Adding a bigger map of the whole installations would be better. More impressive to know what the whole place would look like
Maybe some spoilers.
So far, amazing story. I enjoy the art, the theme, and the scenery. I have a tiny set back which is no problem to anything other than being an American, I do not mean to offend anyone... I am nitpicking because I'm bored and overly flustered.
Anyway, to my point, the acceptance of nudity is just so jarring, heh, because there are called private parts. private parts. Like I enjoy putting myself in the character's shoes, and it just feels unreal to walk around others with junk flying around.
Like with rune, he is flirting with you, getting nice and gushy, boom instant peen right in the open, which seems unreal because an
erection-is like the gateway to what the mind desires, so in this scenario, you go walking out if anyone sees, your completely stiff member. With a guy following right after, it's so sus.
Maybe that's normal there, but jeez if I went there id be covered 24/7, "he had no swim trunks" underwear are fabric swim trunks, and then you could go commando later.
Dunno, the openness of nudity is just awkward for me, causing me to get so flustered and embarrassed I have to pause, kinda sorta scared about what's next.
Other than the openness of nudity, it's overall a lovely story and I love it so far, but I will now avoid the pool and sauna =//3//=
this is a suggestion, an opinion, a thought.
Honestly, if the person who made this I have a suggestion, what if you made an alternative route with where you can wear your underwear to the pool and then go commando later. Have it meet up, I just keep reading about how it's ok and normal when it can be an option. Like remove talking so much about how it's normal or ok, and have the choice of wearing it anyways, for some comfort for some American readers, since it's seen as bazaar like the coach's reaction. I know that its set where it is set. I just dont see the point in it. I understand adding more routes makes it harder and extends the amount of time to update, just wear some undies ;v; no nakies, untill readies!
How do u get rune's cg?
You need to talk with Rune during lunch, and then let him help you later.
Will you add the new sprites as they are finished? Or will you wait to have all the characters finished to add them all at the same time in the VN?
All new sprites would be added at the same time to keep the style consistent. We're probably going to post the new ones on Patreon earlier, but sadly I don't know when hq will have enough time to start working on them :c
I can't wait to see the new sprites :3 my hype is killing me lol. I have a good feeling about the new sprites ^^ I'm extremely sure that they will be awesome, Dawn Chorus is being really awesome
wait is this a bl visual novel or something else
...sort of? I think you could call it that.
Check my profile for more of the same stuff ;)
So I have a little theory, I remember that at first when Arvo is going to take a picture from the view outside the window he used to say something like "can't help but Imagine Lake staring at the sky with his big green eyes" but Lake's eyes are red, Rune's eyes are green and apparently Rune plays basketball which in my opinion Lake looks very basketball player so my theory is... Could it be that Rune and Lake's roles have been swapped? I'm probably wrong but I wanted to ask anyway.
Yeah I bet it's just a writing mistake, but stuff like that happens sometimes. Like maybe his idea at first was that Rune the basketball player was the lion and Lake the dork was the deer but in the last minute he decided to swap sprites. Idk it's like everything kinda makes sense... the eyes color thing, their body shape etc so I wanted to ask. But I also think I'm reading too much into it lol
That text for the first demo was written before we've had the sprites and even final designs for the characters, so only after those were done I went through all the scenes and changed the descriptions. The one with green eyes slipped under the radar for quite a long time, though :D